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Lets call it a fundimental ... by ~Blk-snhitzel-magick:iconBlk-snhitzel-magick:



maybe all i wanted to hear is a little lie
a beautiful ego trip i am on
the speed of sound delivers a sigh
all my thoughts are chemicals ,actually
mess sun radiation is the new dawn
dreaming of making it to the top ,beautifully
theft as always been my favorite line of work
the special kind of social acid
in which you soak
forgive what you get and forget what you give
all this little facts are breaking the reality i wish to weave
after all is over
news papers are blown by the wind
curtain slowly sliding down
they have broken all the plans you did conceived
©2006-2009 ~Blk-snhitzel-magick
:iconblk-snhitzel-magick:

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I dont want to take this step back
but i cant help it
and now ..
all of this

full name is
Lets call it a fundimental mental brake down

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:iconjxonox:
I like it. Its a rush to the mind, its hazui (donno in english), and I like hazui.
I liked the line "forgive what you get and forget what you give" it is a nice, subtle use of word-game I so like, and it convies a powerful messege, to my opinion anyway.
I like the way its structure is all messed up, it really gives the sense of fundimental mental brake down.
all in all its a definite fav.
:icondriftwood1989:
loads of gramatical errors gal but thats just small detail, all in all i really liked this one, ceep up the good work, it says you want heavy criticism so ill be frank, i really like this one, however, most of the song is in pretty simple language and then you say "i wish to weave" wich cinda sets it off balance, still, good play on words and a great poem
:iconblk-snhitzel-magick:
Ho ,thank you
i really glad you liked it
i heard some one once say "hard times brings good songs " but the say that about is own song that was total crap
so lets just ignor him
any way
thanks
:iconblk-snhitzel-magick:
My english isnt that splendet =P
but dont you grab ass on my british dude >_>
and in my opinion it dosent matter how much that words are complex ,but how do you put them together to convey a massege

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